Friday Fictioneers # 5 – Butterfly

Here’s Friday Fictioneer’s 100(ish) word tale inspired by a photo prompt from Madison Woods. Fancy a go? Visit Madison’s blog page, write 100 words and post it back as a comment on her story.


“Can we turn back?” Sue and Daniel had been battling through the forest for hours. Now as the sun set the trees grew tall and dense against the pale yellow sky

“Just a little further” Daniel pulled Sue through the prickly hedge as the branches clawed at her jumper.  Sue felt tired, her ankles ached and the landscape was completely unrecognisable.

Energy fading, they climbed over a small stone wall and paused. Feeling the butterflies of youth swimming in her stomach Sue’s eyes welled up with tears.

“Was it worth it?” Daniel turned to face Sue, rubbing her shoulders as she nodded gently.

Back at the water’s edge where they first kissed 40 years ago, Daniel carefully eased down on to one knee. And she said yes.


27 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers # 5 – Butterfly

    • EmmaMc says:

      It reminded me of going for walks and thought about my grandad and his wife strangely! Glad you liked it and thanks for commenting.

    • EmmaMc says:

      Thank you very much 😀 Like I said in an earlier comment it reminded me of going for walks and got a few ideas flowing.

      • EmmaMc says:

        I just realised it is probably a sub-conscience thing as I got engaged by a river after walking through some woods! Though I wasn’t thinking about that at the time of writing this. Funny how your memories influence you when you don’t even realise it.

    • EmmaMc says:

      Hello and thanks for the comment. Heart warming stories always put me in a good mood so I’m glad you enjoyed it.

  1. dmmacilroy says:

    I echo the others in their praise. This is the first happy ending I’ve run across so far. You are to be commended for that, if nothing else, but there was plenty more to praise. You had the switch, leading us into the gloom to danger unknown, the Awwww! moment as he proposes and she says yes, the mystery of why he waited forty years….

    All in all a very wonderful story. Good use of your 100 word allotment.



    • EmmaMc says:

      Hi Doug

      Thank you very much for the comment. It’s always nice to try something different and it’s always very interesting to see how writers interpret the photo prompts. As I mentioned in a previous comment I have come to realise this may have been subconsciously inspired by my own memories of getting engaged.

  2. Madison Woods says:

    I interpreted it as a renewal of vows, but very sweet and romantic either way. I’m impressed you got something cheerful out of that prompt! Very nice 🙂

    • EmmaMc says:

      Every body has so much history and can pop up just about anywhere. I’m one of those sentimental people though who finds nostalgia in just about everything. Thank you very much for the comment 🙂

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