Thank you Madison Woods once again for a great photo. What I love about writing is that for me, when you start writing it evolves into something you hadn’t really planned it to be.
This was supposed to be a happy flash fiction story however somehow turned into a story based on an earlier Friday Fictioneers piece called Sirens. I’ve named it the same again as follows on, albeit years later. If you want to join in, pop over to Madison Wood’s blog and view her short story and picture. The first part of Siren’s is right here, and puts across Sarah’s view from years before.
Sirens
Jenny sat in the car with the engine running and her heart fluttered. She hadn’t banked on Sarah finding her so soon but when the letter dropped through the door a week ago Jenny knew she couldn’t veil the truth any longer. The crime she witnessed all those years ago had turned the local town into a battlefield and watching the destruction spread through the streets Jenny felt powerless.
Sarah had been on the run for too long and Jenny’s testimony was the only thing that could guarantee her freedom. Jenny recognised her instantly, wearing a green sweater and baseball cap pulled down tightly over her forehead. Sarah walked quickly across the car park and entered the building. Taking a deep breath Jenny switched off the engine. She opened the glove compartment and took out the small revolver and slipped it into her small handbag. It would end today.
Oh dang! Not botched either! Gripping and exciting, yes! Great story.
My linky: http://unduecreativity.wordpress.com/2012/05/24/chasing-the-divine/
Haha, thank you!
Finely written, as usual with lots of suspense. Mine is here: http://readinpleasure.wordpress.com/2012/05/25/fridayfictioneers-preying-mantis/
Thank you very much. I find myself leaning towards suspense a lot more these days.
Oh my! I wasn’t expecting this. A well written story. Looking forward to finding out what happens at the end.
For any of your readers interest in mine here’s the link
http://tollykitsjourney.wordpress.com/2012/05/25/moths-fridayfictioneers-flashfiction/
Haha neither was I! Sometimes you’ve just got to let your mind wander. Thanks for commenting. And once again, loved yours!
Brilliant as always
Thank you very much
I love the suspense at the end…
What will Jenny do with that revolver?
How will it end today?
Check mine out @ http://logo-ligi.com/2012/05/25/mothballs/
I am not sure what she will do with the revolver or how it will end but there will be some sort of resolution to the mess they’re in. Thank you for dropping by and commenting.
You’re welcome
She’s going to eradicate her some pesky moths.
(I actually enjoyed your oiece and love how you kept plowing ahead with what your mind was working on as opposed to figuring out how to include the moths or, for that matter, any of the prompt. I’d better go back and see if I read the right piece.)
Aloha,
Doug
http://ironwoodwind.wordpress.com/2012/05/25/mothley-crue-chicks-trouble/
Hi Doug.
Indeed those troublesome moths better move on! I know, has very little to do with the prompt. I was going to go down the symbolic route but the only link to the moth in this story is the ‘fluttering’ heart, green jumper and the fact she was sitting outside a building. And even that was accidental. Oh well!
I’m glad you liked it and thank you for commenting
The suspense is killing me. Nicely paced, this.
http://castelsarrasin.wordpress.com/2012/05/25/and-then-there-was-silence/
Thank you Sandra
Duh! I pasted the wrong link. Must be the sun…
http://castelsarrasin.wordpress.com/2012/05/24/checkin-out-the-joint-friday-fictioneers-may-2012/
Whoa! Nice job there – small town doom up in here. http://kaitlinandmichaelbranch.com/2012/05/25/angel-in-a-polyester-uniform/
Thank you Kaitlin!
I hope that pistol has more than water inside. Tell us more, please.
Here’s mine: http://thebradleychronicles.wordpress.com/
I have a suspicion it did, thanks for commenting
I felt the tension growing and now I want to know what happens next!
–Jan
http://janmorrill.wordpress.com/2012/05/25/flashfriday-fictioneers-last-supper/
So do I! Best get writing, cheers Jan
I get the feeling in Jenny’s mind this needs to be done. I like it, very suspenseful. I don’t get any fear from this story, just an “I have to finish this” feel. I’ve love to hear how this pans out. Here is the link to my share: http://remakingme-atiyatownes.blogspot.com/2012/05/friday-flash-fiction-best-hubby-ever.html
I’m glad you picked up on that because I didn’t want her to be the kind of girl who feels fear, probably more so because of the back story. Thanks for reading
Ah, revenge. I love it when someone gets what they deserve.
Here’s mine: http://teschoenborn.com/2012/05/25/friday-fictioneer-perspective/
It always feels sweet, though don’t know if Sarah deserves it. I best carry on writing the story and find out. Thanks for reading
Curious. Not really sure who is the good guy / bad guy here. Athough I like that about it. Hope you continue this story line. Here’s mine: http://postcardfiction.com/2012/05/25/despite-your-intentions/
Think it’s a bit of both, though I’m siding with Sarah a bit more. Thanks for commenting
great job setting this story up for a thrilling finale, ending it with a great, confident declaration. Sounds like Jenny cares about Sarah, wants to help her, but where there’s a gun involved things could easily take a turn for the worse.
Oh! I was so busy talking about your story I forgot to leave a link for mine!
http://practicallyserious.com/2012/05/26/friday-flash-f…on-crazy-moths/
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Yes, I remember this one.